A Cold May

May 9, 2018 18:53
The maximum temperature in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.

Furthermore, the maximum temperature today is also about 14 degrees Celsius.

It is cold for May.

According to the records about temperature, it is the first time in recent 25 years that the maximum temperature in Tokyo in May was less than 15 degrees Celsius for the second successive day.

In spite of that, according to the weather forecast, the maximum temperature in the next week will be 30 degrees Celsius.

The number is double.

When there is such a severe change in temperature, you could upset your health.

Since I have a significant event next week, I have to be careful.
寒い5月

昨日の東京の最高気温は約14度でした。

そして、今日の最高気温も約14度でした。

寒いです。

記録によると、5月になってから2日連続で最高気温が15度未満となるのは、25年ぶりだそうです。

それなのに、天気予報の情報によると、来週は最高気温が30度になるそうです。

二倍です。

これだけ気温の変化が激しいと、体調を崩しやすくなる恐れがあります。

来週にはとても大事な予定が入っているので、気をつけなければなりません。
No. 1　Peter's correction
  • The maximum temperature in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • The maximum temperature in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • It is cold for May.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • In spite of that, according to the weather forecast, the maximum temperature in the next week will be 30 degrees Celsius.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • When there is such a severe change in temperature, you could upset your health.
  • When there is such a severe change in temperature, you could upset your health.Such sever changes in temperature can upset your health.
    　although grammatically correct, by saying this in two clauses it seems to unnaturally separate the cause from the effect . The weather change is what can upset your health.
  • Since I have a significant event next week, I have to be careful.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Toru
Thank you so much for the correction! (^^)
No. 2　artboy598's correction
  • A Cold May
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • The maximum temperature in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Furthermore, the maximum temperature today is also about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • It is cold for May.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • According to the records about temperature, it is the first time in recent 25 years that the maximum temperature in Tokyo in May was less than 15 degrees Celsius for the second successive day.
  • According to the records about temperature, it is the first time in recent 25 years that the maximum temperature in Tokyo in May was less than 15 degrees Celsius for the second successive day.
    　first time in ~years
  • In spite of that, according to the weather forecast, the maximum temperature in the next week will be 30 degrees Celsius.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • The number is double.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • When there is such a severe change in temperature, you could upset your health.
  • When there is such a severe change in temperature, the weather/it could upset your health.
  • Since I have a significant event next week, I have to be careful.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Good job! Good luck with your event next week! Stay healthy!
Toru
Thank you so much always for correcting my post! :)
I will continue to watch my health!
No. 3　Chris's correction
  • The maximum temperature in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • The highest it got in Tokyo yesterday was about 14 degrees Celsius.
    　An alternative. I think this sounds more natural, but your original sentence made perfect sense.
  • Furthermore, the maximum temperature today is also about 14 degrees Celsius.
  • Furthermore, the highest it's going to get today is also about 14 degrees Celsius.
    　Same as above
  • It is cold for May.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • According to the records about temperature, it is the first time in recent 25 years that the maximum temperature in Tokyo in May was less than 15 degrees Celsius for the second successive day.
  • According to the records about temperature, it is the first time in 25 years that the highest temperature in Tokyo in May was less than 15 degrees Celsius for the second successive day.
    　I think 'highest temperature' is used more often than 'maximum temperature'.
  • In spite of that, according to the weather forecast, the maximum temperature in the next week will be 30 degrees Celsius.
  • In spite of that, according to the weather forecast, the maximum temperature for next week will be 30 degrees Celsius.
    　"in next week" sounds like you are talking about a specific day, but I think you mean the week in general, so I changed it to "for next week" instead.
  • The number is double.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • When there is such a severe change in temperature, you could upset your health.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Since I have a significant event next week, I have to be careful.
  • Since I have a really important event next week, I have to be careful.
    　If you want to use 'significant', I think this is okay:
    "Since I have an event of significant important next week, I have to be careful."
Toru
Thank you very much for the corrections and helpful comments! (^^)
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